Different Social Status People Final Revise Of Th

based on the last version of the major paper, there are some adjustment which better for the structure and this assignment’s requirement.

1. the argument that mentioned at the first about the different social status people affected by a era that predominated by discrimination is a great point but not very arguable. for this part I want summarized into the first paragraph, which means we can use this point as an intro components and combine with the original contents of the very first paragraph. And i really like the first paragraph sentences especially the last sentences about the main viewpoint, keep it and keep the structure of first paragraph.

2. after the second paragraph, i want first start with the points that riots and violence as an effort to seeking justice in the struggle to achieve respect and equality . for this part i think we should focus on how to expend our points, how to make this point more arguable; as much as you can to deeply talk about this part is important.

3. about the third paragraph, i mentioned that you quote a sentences which is “been a lot of fights together, but we won this one because we learned to flight in a new way” (Luiz Valdez). I think this sentences is really interesting and i want use the third paragraph to engaging my argument in the second paragraph; for example, are there some difference between the zoot suit riots in happened in 1943 and the los angeles riots in 1992; after 50 years is there any change when people faced to riots. when you talk about this part, we can keep use our points about the failture of the criminal justice system and the violence of the government such like that.

I really like the quite use, which is super good and feel free to keep that, but I also want to see the more detailing part when you quote the film’s contents; for example, your can simply describe the actor’s emotion or action when they talk this sentences, what other people’s reaction, also talk little bit your own understanding is better.

these are all the changes of this paper, conclusion part is good, might be just little bit adjustments according to the front paragraph parts.

thanks for your hard working